Comments on: Surprise fix: Telegraphing the pass (or not)

By: Rachelle

Rachelle — Thu, 18 Feb 2010 01:33:28 +0000

I think the foreshadowing has to be in thin layers. I agree about movies though, more and more I can see what’s happening way before it happens. It must be the writer in me because I’ll tell my husband, “I know what they’re going to do.” and he’ll say, “You do?”
Studying all of those foreshadowing techniques really clues you in when someone uses them.

By: Jordan

Jordan — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 23:34:22 +0000

Oh! Oh! You need something for her to look for? Try my MacGuffin Generator!! (The item doesn't actually have to be significant in itself, especially if we spend very little time worrying over it.)

By: Iapetus999

Iapetus999 — Wed, 17 Feb 2010 01:12:28 +0000

I just re-wrote a scene and added some foreshadowing:

“Come on, where is it,” muttered the figure.

We don’t know what she’s looking for in the dark. Maybe nothing. Maybe everything.

Then later in the same scene
“…Prudencia, this is your–” She stopped herself and glanced at Viola who shook her head. “Yes. This is your…new friend Viola. Viola, this is my niece Prudencia”

Why the hesitation? Maybe nothing. Maybe everything.
Although unless I can figure out something important for her to be searching for, I may drop the first part.