As I said yesterday, I don’t think there’s anything wrong with writing well in a character’s voice. A character’s voice is not defined by ending sentences with prepositions or using cliches. A writer’s voice is defined by those things—and it’s defined as “lazy.” (Harsh, I know, but I can say it because I know better and I still write that way. Draft that way, at least. Which is fine, really—draft lazy and revise better. But that’s another topic.)
But at the same time, I don’t want to argue that our character’s voice must always be dictated by the “best” way to phrase a sentence. Here’s a subtle example. Let’s pretend this is dialogue.
“Can we go inside?”
“I have no furniture.”vs.
“Can we go inside?”
“I don’t have any furniture.”
Both lines convey the same information: character is without furniture. Poor character. But how would you characterize someone who says “I have no furniture” vs. someone who says “I don’t have any furniture”? One is more elegant and efficient—but one is more like how someone would speak.
Now let’s put that in narration instead:
“Can we go inside?”
He glanced at the door. He didn’t have any furniture.vs.
“Can we go inside?”
He glanced at the door. He had no furniture.
Which one sounds like a character’s voice, and which one sounds like it’s a separate narrator providing that information? Which one is “better”?
What’s the point? Although most of the time, we can write in a character’s voice and still write well, that doesn’t mean we have to write “perfectly.” But we should at least know there is an alternative—at least look at the words and the sentences to see if there is a better way of expressing it—before we simply claim “But that’s how my character would say it!” (Yeah, and while you’re at Tosche Station, pick me up an extra condenser coil, wouldja?*)
What do you think? Which of the examples do you prefer? When do you choose not to use the “best” or “most writerly” way to say something?
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*Please tell me you get this joke. Please. If not, it’s three seconds—just watch it:
