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This scene is from Façade (you can read the award-winning first chapter here), about two-thirds of the way through the novel.
Setting the scene: Katya Mikhailova is the Soviet cultural attaché in Paris. After she was injured in a bombing, she briefly worked with the police and an American liaison for her own reasons—but she gave them a false name so they wouldn’t know about her position at the embassy. Now she’s tricked them into returning her to the embassy before they could find out her identity.
But the American isn’t letting her get away that easily.
Please note this is basically an unedited rough draft!
As soon as the door latched behind me, a deep sense of unease sent my stomach plummeting. The hair at the nape of my neck stood at attention. Something wasn’t right here. Everything looked the same as when I left, but there was something I couldn’t put my finger on that put me on my guard, a sharp edge to the air.
And then the hand clamped over my mouth.
My heart froze. I could almost see myself ready to lash out with elbows and hands and feet—but I forced myself to breathe through the panic. Thinking clearly was the only thing that could get me away from this attacker, not blind luck.
“I don’t want to hurt you.” His voice was a shade above a whisper. Frank.
My heartbeat redoubled, but still I fought off the urge to fight back. He hadn’t hurt me yet, and he’d just said he wasn’t planning to. No reason to change that by trying to use force.
I shook my head to free my mouth, and Frank moved his hand a centimeter. I stared straight ahead, unwilling to turn and look at him. I spiked my tone with sarcasm. “What took you so long?”
“You’re going to have to explain yourself,” he said.
“Explain what? That I couldn’t trust you to keep me safe anymore?”
“No, not that, Miss Mikhailova.”
The chill of danger in the air finally leached into my veins. I looked to the mirror above the vanity. My lips were still stained red from the beet borshch, but the rest of my face was as pallid as death.
He’d found out the truth and he’d come here to kill me.
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Nice air of suspense. I especially like the description of the lips stained from the beets contrasting with her pallid skin. Creepy.
Ooh, very cool, Jordan!
I really like Katya. Nice tension.
Michelle
Oh, chilling! “I don’t want to kill you” He’d come here to kill me.”
Great writing “in the moment”! Too many things left unsaid!! What is the truth???
Loved this line: The chill of danger in the air finally leached into my veins.
And, I loved the “sharp edge to the air” in the first paragraph!