Varying the tension level to keep your readers’ interest

This entry is part 25 of 26 in the series Tension, suspense and surprise

Or, How writing is like spicy mac

A couple weeks ago, my family went out to lunch. We got a side of macaroni and cheese that was advertised, correctly, as having a little kick to it. The spice was too much for the kids, so my husband and I ended up eating almost all of the macaroni and cheese.

Macaroni and Cheese @ Seersucker RestaurantThe first few bites were really tasty (and I’m really picky about mac’n’cheese). Within a few bites, the spice began to set in. It wasn’t too spicy—no tears, no runny noses—but I could see why my kids needed water.

But once we were halfway through our meal, my husband and I both realized that we weren’t really tasting the mac or the cheese. After a while, all you could taste was the spice.

Early on in our writing, we usually learn early on that we need tension and conflict in our scenes. Tension, suspense and conflict are vital, and few people will read fiction without that “spice.”

However, sometimes it’s easy to go overboard on this vital element. At the climax, we’ll probably have a long passage of high-tension scenes, but if every scene of the book features world! threatening! consequences!, all you can taste is the spice—and the book feels just as one-note as if every scene had no tension at all.

Spice isn’t the spice of life—it’s variety. So change up the tension levels in your scenes.

Ten ways to change up the tension in your scenes

Flatline1. Use humor. A joke can reduce the tension in a scene, or just give the readers a break from unremitting THE WHOLE PLANET WILL DIE!!! drama.

2. Switch storylines. Changing to another group of characters doing something else often helps to vary the tension level. This also works in reverse—if the tension gets too low in one storyline, switch to another, then change back to a point where something more interesting is happening.

3. Bump up your character’s proactivity. Maybe your characters aren’t facing chase scene after chase scene, but they’ve been kidnapped and they’re being dragged around the country, and they’re freaking out the whole time. That level of tension, that helpless response, makes the tension (and the characters!) seem one-note. Don’t let your characters just wring their hands and whine. Do something!

4. Change your character’s goal. If we’ve had five scenes in a row of your characters trying to do the exact same thing, and encountering the same problem, or the same level of problems, something’s got to change. (You know what they say about the definition of insanity?)

5. Change the source of the threat. Maybe your last eight scenes have been at a 7 on the tension scale. You might be able to bump some of them up

6. Use dramatic irony. Dramatic irony is when the audience knows something the characters don’t, usually something that will pull the rug from under the characters. If you have scenes from the antagonist’s POV, for example, you can set up dramatic irony (and switch to that storyline to intercut the tension).

7. Have your characters reach a goal. Throughout the book, we mostly try to frustrate our characters’ goals because it increases the suspense and tension. To change things up, have them accomplish something—it could be something small, like retrieving an important artifact, or it could be something major, like defeating the bad guy (who turns out to be only a minor villain).

8. Give us a campfire scene. Let the characters celebrate and relax, if only for a minute. Especially good after a victory that turns out to be false.

9. Use a sequel. You may not have the time or place to have a celebration scene right now, but if your character has a minute, he or she might be able to go through the stages of an emotional reaction to the action, naturally a bit lower in tension.

10. Show the recovery. You’ve got hearts racing, stomachs clenching and palms sweating (dude, gesture clichĂ©s). But do your characters ever stop doing those things? Do they strive to (or just naturally) get their visceral responses under control? Take a deep breath, take a look around, take a minute to reorient your goals before you plunge in again.

Again, tension is absolutely vital to a novel—but having all your scenes with equally high tension is just as stultifying as all scenes with low tension. We don’t want every bite of our meal to taste like plain noodle or like plain spice. Vary the tension of your stories to create a truly engaging taste reading experience.

How else can you vary the tension in your scenes?

Photo credits
Macaroni and cheese by David Berkowitz
Flatline by Myles Grant
both via Flickr/CC

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What’s a street team?

Basically, a street team is a group of reader who’ve enjoyed an author’s books (you might call them “fans”). The team is a fun place to socialize with the author and other fans, and it’s also a way to help street team members spread the word about these books.

In plain English, this particular street team will be run through a Facebook group. Each week, I’ll hand out “ops” that will consist of short missions such as pinning a book cover on Pinterest, tweeting about a giveaway, voting in a contest, leaving a review, etc. We’ll also have fun discussions to get to know one another. That’s it!

What you'll have to do

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Requirements to join

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The Top 10 Fonts You Should Never Use on a Book Cover (and 15 better alternatives)

I’ve liked typography since high school. I’ve even made my own fonts. I believe there’s a time and a place for almost every font—but not your book cover.

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Your cover’s job is to convince us to read your book, that it’s worth our time and money more than the other 500,000 books out there. Most of these fonts are going to do the opposite: they’re so overused or generic, they have no place on your cover.

font arial
Arial and a number of its sans serif cohorts (Helvetica, Tahoma, Lucida Sans) have become the go-to fonts when we want a clean, sans serif look. Admittedly, they can sometimes work, but Arial . . . unless you want your book to look like somebody’s web page, just leave it alone.

font black jack
I wish I had a collection of all the places I’ve seen this font, starting with my blog header from seven years ago. There’s nothing inherently wrong with this font, I guess, but I’ve seen it on book covers, company logos, signs and more. It was a good font once. Let it die.

font bradley
This one might be leaning a little toward personal preference, but it comes down to this: if your font came bundled with Microsoft Word, it’s probably already overused.

font mistral
This is the font we used to look like you were handwriting something . . . in elementary school.

Along these same lines, Brush Script. Just don’t do it.

font papyrus
Okay, when your font is mentioned by name in a parody, it’s over. This font has been used to “represent” so many times and places that it’s lost all inherent meaning. Ancient Egypt? British Navy? Werewolves? WHY NOT? A local restaurant thinks it screams “contemporary Mexican,” especially in red text over a green hacienda. It screams, “Totally illegible” to me.

font scriptina
This font was already starting to be overused about eight years ago. You want swirly and you want statements, but you don’t want “Oh yeah, that’s the same kind of writing my friend’s blog used ten years ago.”

font chiller
This font is not scary; it’s illegible. This font does not make your book look frightening or suspenseful. It makes it look amateurish.

font tnr
I love Times New Roman. I do. I reset every word processor I use to write in Times New Roman. But the default font of business communications has no place on (or in!) your book. At all.

Possible exception: you’re writing a history of Times New Roman. Then sure.

font dearest
And all other 18th- and 19th-century handwriting fonts. They do not make your book look intriguing, historical or cool. They make your book look cliché.

Possible exceptions: your book is actually set in the 18th or 19th century and involves handwritten notes. Or you’re a pirate.

You, sir, are no pirate.

font comic sans
Just no.

(If I have to explain why, please just take this as a sign that you need to hire a cover designer.)

Viable alternatives

Naturally, in a year or two or five, these could all well become candidates for the list, but here are some legitimate, free alternatives to the above!

Handwriting fonts

Step aside, Mistral & Bradley Hand. Check out these handdrawn fonts from FontSquirrel.com. Of particular note, I like Harabara Hand, Jinky (unless you’ve got a capital J in your name or title . . . totally thought that said “linky”), and Journal. (Caution on Rock Salt, though. Anything Google offers as an option for Blogger headers is probably at the tipping point.)

Sans serif

You can do better than Arial et al. Sans serif fonts at FontSquirrel are a good place to start. My faves are more stylized (Lintel) or sophisticated (Linux Biolinium, Proza, Tenderness).

Serif

Yep, you can use serif fonts on covers. Again, Times New Roman is out (and as this article points out, Trajan and Copperplate are overdone in this department, too). It’s almost hard to go wrong other than that.

For interiors, steer clear of Times New Roman, too. Book Antiqua, Palatino and Garamond are all standard choices, while Bembo, Baskerville and the like are what professionals gravitate toward. Me? I’m partial to Linux Libertine: legible with LOTS of extended special characters. FontSquirrel has more serif options, too.

Script

Let’s do away with BlackJack in favor of some more original alternatives! Try Dancing script or Euphoria script. Going a little fancier? CAC Champagne has served me well, and Great vibes is lovely.

You want something with extra flourish? Pass by Scriptina and consider Miama or Promocyja. Legible and fancy. If you’re feeling daring, skirt the edge of readability with Lovers quarrel.

Choosing fonts

When choosing a font, always remember to look at your title (or name or whatever) in that font. I usually choose my fonts based on those specific glyphs—like the font in my header (from P22 type foundry). I chose it for the J glyph; I actually had to alter the M to get what I really wanted.

If you’re really, really picky, or you want something even more specialized, I suggest shopping at MyFonts.

Matching a font you’ve seen elsewhere? Try Identifont (describing it according to a limited set of letters) or MyFont’s WhatTheFont! (upload image).

No affiliate links here, folks. I’m that committed to typography.

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April accountability; May goals

Normally, I post about my goals on the first Friday of the month, but with all my conference posts last week, it seemed like a pretty full week blogging-wise.

GoalsApril accountability

Reporting on my goals for last month

  • Top priority: finalize my presentations for (and attend) the LDStorymakers conference!—Yep! It went really, really amazingly, wonderfully well. My classes were all packed, and I was almost moved to tears to see so many people as dedicated to learning about the craft as I am.
  • Second priority: Finish those last 5 Whitney reads!—Yes! Just in the nick of time, too. But now I’ve read almost as many books this year as I did last year—and I want to read more! It’s so much easier and more fun than editing!
  • Seriously, write that dang novella.—Um, no. I got some words here, but this is still not done.
  • Deep edit Spy Another Day 3 and incorporate cultural feedback.—My cultural feedback was delayed, but honestly, I had to put this project on the back burner myself, too.
  • Reread Saints & Spies to begin the publication phase!—No.
  • Write new stuff for next writing craft book.—just no.

May goals

You guys, I’m struggling a little here. I’ve had this novella on my to-do list for I don’t know how many months, and it’s really dragging. Plus I can’t find it in me to get these edits after working my editing fingers to the bone for the last year. I love the story, but I really don’t want to work on it anymore. I’ve given myself time away from it, and all that’s done is make me want even more time—and I’ve kind of promised this book is coming out this summer. I want to keep my deadlines—my commitments. I’ve already dropped one book from my production schedule, and I feel like if I drop any more, I’ll lose what little momentum I have.

So, this month, I must

  • FINISH THE NOVELLA—I have finally started to move the needle on this! Yay!
  • DO THE EDITS
  • Do rewrites on Saints & Spies
  • Participate in a sale event (more on that coming up later in the month!)
  • Think about marketing & website stuff.

Normally, with only five things on my list, I pat myself on the back for my reasonable expectation. But considering how long some of these “list-cicles” have already been on there, and how little progress I’ve made, I’m definitely daunted this month, and already feeling the pressure.

What’s up for you this month?

Photo by Celestine Chua

Becoming a better writer: read a craft book

This entry is part 4 of 4 in the series Becoming a better writer

I. Love. Books. I assume most writers do! I especially love to read books on the craft of writing. Studying these books always helps to up my craft, even if the specifics aren’t geared toward me, and there are lots of amazing books out there on screenwriting, storytelling, the life of a writer, and more, as well as specific aspects to hone your craft.

Here are some of the great craft books that I’ve read (affiliate links):

Story Engineering by Larry Brooks Elements of Fiction Writing – Scene & Structure by Jack Bickham
How to Write a Damn Good Novel: A Step-by-Step No Nonsense Guide to Dramatic Storytelling by James N. Frey How to Write a Damn Good Novel, II: Advanced Techniques For Dramatic Storytelling by James N. Frey
Save the Cat by Blake Snyder 2k to 10k: Writing Faster, Writing Better, and Writing More of What You Love by Rachel Aaron
Write Great Fiction – Plot & Structure by James Scott Bell Writing the Breakout Novel by Donald Maass

You could also try or . . . just sayin’.

This year, I’m reading The War of Art by Steven Pressfield and rereading Writing Screenplays That Sell by Michael Hauge on my Kindle, and hopefully finding those awesome writing books that were somewhere in my TBR before I moved . . . hm….

What do you think? What are your favorite writing craft or writing life books? What will you read this year?

When the character doesn’t know he’s going to arc

So we know we have to set up a character arc in the beginning to create the maximum effect as the character goes on a journey of internal, emotional growth (in a growth arc). Since the character is going to learn and grow, obviously they’ll start off in a place where they need this growth. In that sense, it’s a bad place.

Of course, sometimes—often!—our character doesn’t realize he’s in a bad place. He’s operating under a mistaken belief about himself and the world, but right now, that belief is working for him. It’s protecting him from repeating the bad experience that left him with this wrong belief in the first place.

Nicole's Many Emotions

For example, maybe our hero couldn’t learn to ride a bike as a child, and his mother ridiculed him for it, etc. (his bad experience). As an adult, he has a hard time believing he’s capable (his mistaken belief). He protects himself from confronting this painful belief by not trying new things, living a cautious life (his outward behavior at the outset). Throughout our story, he’ll learn that he is a capable person after all (his character arc).

But at the beginning of the book, our hero doesn’t know he’s about to learn and grow. He’s bopping along in his safe, cautious little life, thinking all is well, and he’ll never have to change. More than that, he isn’t consciously thinking about how cautious and small his world has become, or how incapable he feels, or anything else. He thinks he’s happy because he believes he’s solved the problem of feeling incapable—by avoiding situations where he’s incapable.

Let’s frown-smile for our protagonist here. It’s sad and cute that he feels that way, and throughout the course of the book, we’re going to prove to him that he’s wrong. To do that, we’re going to have to break him down and make him face the hard reality of his mistaken belief before he can move past it to grow.

But we’re not there yet. Right now, we’re just at the beginning, where he still thinks things are fine. He won’t realize he’s limited his life this way, or that he has this mistaken belief until later in the story. So how can we show them to the reader and set up the character arc adequately?

Subtly setting up the character arc

I believe that we have to set up a character arc early on in a book with an incident that illustrates the mistaken belief in action, and how that mistaken belief is holding the character back. In a book where the character realizes they need to learn and grow early on, it’s usually fairly easy to do this in the beginning. You can be somewhat obvious without hitting the reader over the head.

On the other hand, when our character isn’t ready to begin the journey, when they’re still happy in—and oblivious of—the mistaken belief, we have a bigger challenge: showing the character’s belief and how it’s crippling them to the reader while allowing our character to remain blissfully oblivious.

The deep-seated mistaken belief can actually work in our favor here. The character is so used to using this belief to justify his actions and explain away contradictory material that we can have him do just that, showing the reader the thought process that’s holding him back. So for this example, perhaps we present him with the opportunity to do something he’s always wanted to—climb Mount Everest or be on a reality TV show—and he lets the opportunity pass.

Naturally, we can’t make the impact of this action too bad, or we’ll clue the character into his own need for change too soon. We can use a more subtle “bad consequence” to prove that this attitude isn’t helping him—whether that’s a split-second wistful wish that he could accomplish that goal, or suspiciously harsh mental castigation not to fritter away his life in pointless dreams.

These techniques work best for close narration (first person and deep POV third person), where we can use a slightly more unreliable narrator, rather than the more dispassionate narrators (more distant third person and omniscient). With more narrative distance, the narration sets up the expectation that facts are being reported, rather than the characters experiencing and relaying the story. Thus when we report our character’s lies to himself, we have to work even harder to show the reader that these thoughts are not “true.”

If we set this moment up correctly, the reader will briefly note the circumstances, but it won’t stop the story, or make the reader think the character needs to change right away. Later, when the character is confronted with the ultimatum, realizing he has no choice but to change, the readers and the character can look back over the experiences of the novel thus far for evidence to support that ultimatum, cementing the need for change in everyone’s minds.

Learn more about character arcs!

What do you think? When do you have your characters begin to realize they have to change?

Photo credit: Nichole’s Many Emotions by Ally Aubry via Flickr/CC

More resources on gesture crutches

gesture crutchesLast week, I gave a class at the LDStorymakers Conference on gesture crutches. You can find my presentation here, but today I’m sharing the resources I cited in class!

Books on the topic

Blog posts on gesture crutches

The bulk of my presentation came from my own blog posts, especially my series on gesture crutches: finding gesture crutches (the macro code), tracking & changing gesture crutches and strategies to fix the top 10 gesture crutches.

You can find John Gilstrap quoting his editor, Michaela Hamilton, here.

Other resources

Courses by Margie Lawson including Empowering Characters’ Emotions and Writing Body Language and Dialogue Cues opened my eyes to gesture crutches and started me on the path to take my writing to the next level!