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Secret sauce: Story structure

This entry is part 5 of 16 in the series Spilling the secret sauce

Intuitively, we all know when a story has good structure, but we don’t all have an intuitive understanding of how to actually execute (or even explain) that structure. But knowing how to partition your story and how to pace the major events and turning points makes a huge difference between a novel that’s publishable and one that’s not.

Most plotting methods can be helpful in brainstorming types of events, but they don’t often help with the actual pacing. I’ve been using Larry Brooks’s “Story Structure” method for three and a half years and six novels. But it’s also really useful in revisions. I’ve used it on two novels I wrote before I discovered Story Structure—including the novel I took from rejection to offer.

Larry Brooks, author of many, many scripts, four published novels, and the blog StoryFix, published this in a blog series. It’s very much worth it to read the Story Structure full series, but I’ll give a quick overview here.

The structure is in four parts with three turning points separating them (plus two “pinch points”). Each part of the story should be about one quarter of the story.

Part one is the Set-up. In this part of the story, we meet the characters and are introduced to the story question. (If you’re reading this and thinking “Oh, the Ordinary World,” you’re not alone.) Here we also establish what’s at stake, but most of all, we’re working up to the turning point at the end of this part: Plot Point 1.

Brooks says that First Plot Point is the most important moment in your story. Located 20-25% of the way into your story, it’s

the moment when the story’s primary conflict makes its initial center-stage appearance. It may be the first full frontal view of it, or it may be the escalation and shifting of something already present.

This is a huge turning point—where the whole world gets turned on its head. (If you like, you can say this is where we formally pose the story question.)

PP1 bridges into Part 2—the Response. The hero/heroine responds to the first plot point. This response can be a refusal, shock, denial, etc., etc. That doesn’t mean they have to do nothing—they have to do something, and something more than sitting and stewing—but their reactions are going to be . . . well, reactive. The hero(ine) isn’t ready to go on the offensive to save the day quite yet—they’re still trying to preserve the status quo.

In the middle of this part (about 3/8s of the way through your story), comes Pinch Point 1. Brooks defines a pinch point as “an example, or a reminder, of the nature and implications of the antagonistic force, that is not filtered by the hero’s experience. We see it for ourselves in a direct form.” So it’s something bad that we get to see happen, showing us how bad the bad guy is, raising the stakes.

At the end of the Response comes the Mid-Point. As the name suggests, this is halfway through the story. And here, the hero and/or the reader receives some new bit of information. It’s pretty important, though—this is the kind of revelation that changes how we view the story world, changing the context for all the scenes that come after it.

Then we swing into Part Three, the Attack. Now our hero(ine) is ready to go on the offensive. He’s not going to operate on the bad guy’s terms anymore—he’s taking matters into his own hands, and he’s going after the bad guy. This is the proactive hero’s playing field now.

In the middle of this part (5/8s of the way through the story), comes Pinch Point 2, which is just like PP1—a show of how bad the bad guy is.

Part Three ends with a lull before the Second Plot Point, our last new information in the story. This last revelation is often the key to solving the mystery or fixing the problem—it’s the last piece of info the hero needs to make his world right. This comes 75% of the way into the story.

And now we’re ready for Part Four, the Resolution. Our hero steps up and takes the lead for the final chases, the last showdowns. Here we get to see how much of a hero he really is—he passes his final tests, proves he’s changed and finally, saves the day.

What do you think? Can you see this in place in your writing, or in other works? What advantages do you see to this method?

Photo credits: structure—Christopher Holland; gasp—Becka Spence; attack—D. B. King

Secret sauce: Re-vision

This entry is part 3 of 16 in the series Spilling the secret sauce

For a long time, I did NOT understand the concept of “revision.” I’d edit, sure, but I guess I labored under the belief that “real” writers had perfect words fall out of their heads in the perfect order and once you’ve finished a copy edit, you’re done.

Ha. Hahaha. Ha.

Virtually no writer publishes a first draft. Virtually no writer publishes a first draft that they’ve only spitshined.

reenvisionAnd it wasn’t until I really dug in to understand that revision can (and often should) mean re-envisioning your story that I really began to be a better writer—a publishable writer. Author Natalie Whipple knows where I’m coming from, as she lists “I wish I took editing seriously” as one of the things she wished she’d done differently in her writing journey:

I spent way too long doing edits that did not cut it. Sadly, it wasn’t until my 8th book that I really learned how to revise. Before that, I would do as little as humanly possible to satisfy my crit partners’ concerns. I never made big enough changes, never believed I NEEDED to make bigger changes. It was only when I really dug in, saw my story as malleable, that I truly improved.

Amen, sister.

Frequently when I get critiqued or judged, I fall prey to the natural tendency to get defensive of my work (getting better with regular practice at getting critiqued!). Granted, all suggestions won’t work for your story, you know your story best, and sometimes critique partners can be just plain toxic. But even bad advice can make our story better when it makes us take another look at our story with a critical eye, when we recognize that just because we wrote it that way, it might not be the best way.

Wait, what?

Just because you wrote it one way doesn’t mean it’s the best way. We should always consider if there’s a better way to say what we’re saying.

I see people defend weak writing by saying, “But it’s my character’s voice.” Honestly, I think a lot of the time what they’re really thinking is that “I wrote it that way, so it’s right.” Maybe so—but could you write it better?

This issue runs much deeper than just word choice and voice: to make your work as good as possible, you may have to re-envision the novel itself. Is this characterization right? Could this theme be stronger? Is there a better sequence for these events—and are they even the right events?

This subject is probably more appropriate for a series of its own, or a hands-on class, but here are a few of the things I think of when really trying to re-envision my story:

  • What is the theme of this story? What does the character learn as a result of the story? How does s/he change?
  • How can I show and apply that change in the course of the story?
  • Does the story overall work? Are there plot holes or unsupported incidents?
  • Characters. Oh, characters.
  • Do all the scenes and events of the story support the theme?
  • Are all the scenes and events of the story necessary, and do they move it forward?

Is this hard? Is it worth it? YES and DOUBLE YES. Can you do it all by yourself? Maybe—but impartial critiques aimed at helping you tell your story in the best way possible can also be an invaluable tool. Even after you’ve re-envisioned your novel, these critiques help to make sure you’re getting across the message you wanted.

Because why else would we edit? Why wouldn’t we just submit first drafts and companies publish first drafts? Because there’s a better way to say it. And I think (and hope) self-publishing will ride out the same way: you’ll be able to tell who edits and who slaps their first drafts on the market, who says “I wrote it that way, so it’s right” and who says, “I did write it that way, but maybe there’s a better way to say it.”

More than anything else, real revision is the skill that will take anyone’s writing to the next level. We’ll cover lots of the above concepts throughout the secret sauce series, because when it comes down to it, the secret sauce isn’t about getting things right in the first draft. It’s about revising your way to “publishability.”

What do you think? What lessons have you learned from revision (or just thinking about it?)?

Photos by Briana Zimmers; map image courtesy of The Journey 1972 (South America “addicted”)

Pre-requisites to the Secret Sauce

This entry is part 2 of 16 in the series Spilling the secret sauce

Some ingredients in the secret sauce of taking your writing to the next level are more basic than others. But like any secret sauce, it works a lot better with the right foundation.

So, what kind of foundation do you need to apply the secret sauce?

The extreme basics of grammar, formatting, etc.

Believe it or not, it’s possible to get published—by a trade publisher, even!—without a firm grasp on the grammatical concept of a “sentence.” However, the odds are pretty hard against it.

Grammar is a basic building block of writing. You don’t have to diagram your sentences or understand the definition of a periphrastic tense, but I think it’s a good idea to understand how to write a complete sentence, and how to make your subjects and verbs agree, before you dwell on any other part of your writing craft.

Some craft basics

This list might be somewhat arbitrary, but here are a few of the things that I studied, learned or just formed opinions within my first couple novels. (Yeah, that long.)

Understand telling versus showing

Note that this doesn’t say “always execute telling versus showing perfectly.” It means that you need to understand what both of them are, so that you can catch yourself and understand how to fix it when others catch it in your writing.

Understand POV

I’m a POV purist, but understanding the basics of modern point-of-view is a basic of writing saleable fiction. Know what head hopping is, know who your POV characters are, know how to choose them well.

Understand basic character sympathy

With my first couple novels, I assumed that my readers would automatically sympathize with my main character.

This is not true.

After receiving my first real critiques, I saw how important it is to build character sympathy, so it was one of the first things I really set out to study. (And that’s why it’s also one of the first series I did on this blog!) Without character sympathy, nobody will read past the first chapter.

Critique and be critiqued

Critically examining someone else’s fiction with an eye toward helping them improve it helps you do the same for your own. Similarly, getting quality feedback from someone else helps you see things you couldn’t, look at your fiction through new eyes, and learn more about writing craft in the most personalized and hands-on way possible.

Read

Because, seriously, how else can you write?

Tried to write fiction in any form

The most important prerequisite, though, is that you’ve at least tried to write fiction, any length, any form. Setting that goal and making that effort is the first step that lays the groundwork for everything else above, everything we’ll read in the series, and everything you’ll learn about writing.

Discouraged?

Don’t be! Notice that everything above can be learned—and it can be learned through practice. Despite the myth of the perfect first draft and its naturally talented author, nobody is born knowing every advanced writing technique. All of these “prerequisites,” and even the ingredients of the secret sauce can. be. learned.

And, frankly, the “secret sauce” will vary from person to person. Maybe you’ve grasped several of the concepts I’ll cover in the series, but are still working on the above. That’s okay. We all learn different things at different paces—and that’s fine. There are things we all need to learn and refine and work on, either in drafting or revision or revision or revision (there’s a reason that’s in there three times!).

What my “secret sauce” did for me

So will all this stuff work?

My “secret sauce” recipe base is the steps I took over the course of a couple years, focused mainly on improving one novel. But first, I submitted this one novel to an editor I met at a conference and got a fairly quick rejection (with very useful feedback). I continued to learn and grow and apply and refine, until I was finally ready to resubmit the same manuscript to the same publisher—always a big risk, but even more so when it came directly against the advice of another editor for the same publisher.

I did it anyway.

It was accepted.

My secret sauce took an unpublishable manuscript to a publishable one. Like I said, the ingredients in your secret sauce will probably be different, but pretty much everyone has something new they can learn to improve their writing craft.

What do you think are the most basic aspects of writing craft and the business of writing? Come join the conversation!

Photo credits—secret sauce ingredients: Paolo Valdemerin

New writing craft series coming up!

This entry is part 1 of 16 in the series Spilling the secret sauce

It’s time for another writing craft series! It feels like it’s been forever since I’ve had a chance to dig deep into craft, and (shockingly) digging deep is exactly what helps me improve that craft.

So I’m very excited to announce that the next writing series will be . . .

SPILLING THE SECRET SAUCE!

My “secret sauce” is a recipe for better writing on all levels. It’s the teachings, trick and tips that I feel took my writing from amateur to publishable. A preview of some of the post topics and areas:

  • Building better sentences
  • Building better scenes
  • Avoiding amateur mistakes
  • Writing real emotions
  • Plot and structure
  • And more!

Got some secret sauce of your own to spill? Contact me with your idea or just write your guest post and send it to me, jordan at jordanmccollum dot com!

What do you want to hear about?

Sauce photo by Alan Sheffield