This is one of my favorite, most useful posts. Since we mentioned editing gesture crutches recently, I wanted to share it again!
I’ll admit it: I’m addicted to gesture crutches. I use them over and over again throughout a book or chapter or sometimes even scene. It’s like I can’t stop, especially when I’m drafting!
What are gesture crutches, and why should we avoid them? As editor Michaela Hamilton said in an revision letter:
Don’t resort to overused gestures such as shrugged, nodded, sighed, shook his head. These are ok occasionally, but in general, seek more vivid gestures that tell more about a character, help set a mood, and create visual dimension in the scene.
Guilty as charged [author John Gilstrap writes]. My problem here is that the ones she notes are the only conversational gestures that I know of. I stipulate that I overuse them, but if anyone has other gesture arrows that I can add to the quiver, feel free to speak up.
I, too, am guilty as charged. It’s tough to come up with original gestures, and sometimes distracting to the reader. (Think we’re alone in struggling with this? Check out this thread on Nathan Bransford’s forums.) While critique partners and editors are pretty much a must-have for the ultimate solution, I’ve found a couple ways to check myself on gestures.
Using character-specific, unique gestures
A couple weeks ago, I finished Brandilyn Collins’s Getting Into Character: Seven Secrets a Novelist Can Learn From Actors. Her very first secret, “Personalizing,” describes the process of finding a unique gesture for a character. Her example is of a rich, insecure woman who dislikes her hands, but wants to show off her ring, a symbol of her wealth. Can’t you just imagine how a woman like that would hold her hands? (It’s a conflicted gesture!)
Writing simple gestures more creatively
I also heartily recommend Margie Lawson‘s course on Empowering Character Emotions, which covers these repetitive gestures and how to write them “fresh” and “empowered,” when necessary—and how to tell when they’re not necessary at all. I also have her lecture packet on Writing Body Language and Dialogue Cues Like a Psychologist, which I’m sure builds upon those same principles (but I haven’t chiseled out the time to read it yet. Shame on me!). Margie teaches Empowering Character Emotions online in March (it was $30 last year) and the lecture packets are available year-round ($22—both are a great deal!) (and I only wish I were affiliated with her 😉 ).
Come up with a stable of original expressions
This is also from Margie Lawson (with a little interpretation from me). I realized I have a lot of sarcasm in my MS (which I love), and there were only about five gestures of sarcasm (folded arms, rolling eyes, one raised eyebrow, scoffing, pursed lips, if I remember correctly). Since I already knew the emotion I was going for, I set out to write some original, creative gestures that conveyed sarcasm. Then I had a collection of gestures to draw on and even extrapolate from further. I also found The Bookshelf Muse’s Emotion Thesaurus super-helpful!
Pick the body part first
You could do any of these by picking a lesser-used body part. I once played this writers’ game where two members of the group had to act out a scene and the rest of us had to write about their emotions using assigned body parts. I had wrists and heels. It was awesome! One character stomped around hard enough to leave half-moons in the cement floor. Another offered apologetic wrists. Another had her arms fly open like windshield wipers. Will I ever use those? Maybe not. But that kind of vivid, imaginative imagery can help you create better, more appropriate images.
Monitoring your gestures
I’m proudest of this one because I came up with it myself (extrapolated from Margie’s EDITS system). When editing a scene, make a note of what body part/area is used in the line: hands, eyes/eyebrows, shoulders, lips/mouth, etc., in the margin. Then read the list aloud for the whole scene/chapter. This helped me pinpoint repetitive or too-similar gestures in close context as well as look at the gestures themselves. If I found I had ARMS too close to one another, I could look at those two gestures quickly and easily to see how similar they were.
Pull out the sentences en masse
New to the 2012 edition! I wrote a bit of code to make Word pull out all the sentences that use these gesture crutches, and you can customize it to your word list (there’s also a great version by Paul Edelstein for code-o-phobes!). I’ll probably still use the monitoring technique above to make sure I’m not using any one body part too often in a scene, but now I can focus on just my use of smiles or nods throughout the book to make sure they’re necessary, not repetitive, and fresh.
What do you think? How do you keep yourself from repeating the same conversational gestures?
Photo credits: crutches on orange background—Christian Guthier; my cousin’s Facebook.
I so know this! I try to make those things unique to a character, but it’s easy to overkill even then. And isn’t the Emotion Thesaurus such a help?
A great idea to use lesser body parts and to put it in the margin for checking. I’ve used FIND but that doesn’t do as full a job as these suggestions. Thanks. PS How do you know when to use a gesture or not? I just go by how it feels and what I’ve recently done or not done. I understand about overuse and under-use but how do we get that middle ground balance right? It would make a good post.
It’s all about how it feels! I also look at the context and the gesture. Certain gestures are already overused before you even start writing (hello, clichés).
If it looked like I was only using a gesture to identify the speaker, without adding meaning to his words, I cut the gesture and found another action or description or (gasp) used said. Sometimes it would work better as dialogue. Etc.
Hm, underuse. I think most of the time, people wouldn’t miss the usual gestures, but they would notice a total lack of body language. Make sure the message is getting across!
Friday I have a post coming about how to make changes like those to your gestures.
I tend to try and do things like “he lifted a shoulder” instead of “he shrugged”, but I too fall into these crutches easily. Also, sometimes I think you don’t need the gestures, ’cause you can tell by dialogue what a character is probably doing/looking like.
When I write dialogue I see the scene in my head, and I can also see their gestures-every lift of the eyebrow–every dip of a head. Grins happen easily if their conversation is pleasant. Describing a face, even a part of a face, is a great way to show emotion. Or the way someone leans in close to show they’re listing–or their back stiffens in panic, or shock, or even anger depending on the dialogue. I’ve never “seen” a scene where the characters are statically talking to each other. Even during a stakeout, something is physically going on to give the reader a three dimensional view of their world.
My main character has a cast on her forearm, and she’s always hugging it to her chest when she’s thinking. That little gesture is unique only to her in this story. It also reminds the reader she’s vulnerable–albeit temporarily, and it’s also a link to the previous book.
When I write a scene, I often catch myself actually making the faces my characters make so I can describe them. But that’s no excuse for repeating “eyes” or “eyebrows” or “smile.” Your example of a unique, multi-layered gesture is fantastic!
Great stuff Jordan. I am cleaning up a MS right now and this is my next step. Bookmarked.
these are great. Donna I want a blog on your comment, please. Lisa S.
If you mean a gesture unique to a character, we touch on that just a little in the first suggestion here: http://jordanmccollum.com/2012/07/writing-crutches-gestures-2/